启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌,每年都会整理发布当年的考研英语作文模板高分范文。本文呈现的2023年考研英语二大作文批改例文中,每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正,是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。
一、2023年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2023年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe and interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2023年考研英语二大作文批改例文
What a vivid line chart it is! It extibits a far-reaching plenomenon.
During 2012 to 2021, the level of health literacy in 2012 accounted for for 8 percent which showed that the capacity of our residents maintaining their own health wasn"t in an ambitional situation. However, after 2016, this ratio was increasing rapidly instead of growing steadily and this number boosted to 25.4 percent in 2021. This phenomenon serves to remind us of the fact that our residents, especially 15 to 69 years old, are acquiring more heath knowledge and enjoying a heathier life. Here are my perspectives.
First and foremast, the Reform and Opening up policy plays a significant role in health literacy development, because of the revenue enriching, more and more residents can adjust their budget on medical service purchase which can enable them to access to the health information easily. Furthermore, the social media on the Internet benefits residents a lot, beause huge amounts of hospitals choose to create accounts for and the knowlege of health which is used to be rare is widespreaded now. In the end, with the widespread of compulsory education, our residents are allowed to understand the medical system of our society which brings convenience to them on looking for a professional doctor and ultilizing their healthcare.
To put all into the nutshell, our residents have gained this achievement of health literacy development, a The level of health literacy will increase more and our residents will harvest a better medical service in the future.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:plenomenon
批改:phenomenon
原文: for
批改:删除
原文:t a vivid line chart it is! It extibits a far-reaching plenomenon. During 2012 to 2021, the level of health literacy in 2012 accounted for for 8 percent which showed that the capacity of our residents maintaining their own health wasn"t in an ambitional situation. However, after 2016, this ratio was increasing rapidly instead of growing steadily and this number boosted to 25.4 percent in 2021. This phenomenon serves to remind us of the fact that our residents, especially 15 to 69 years old, are acquiring more heath knowledge and enjoying a heathier life. Here are my perspectives.
批改:用具体数据描述图表内容,清晰直观,揭示这些数据反映的社会现象
原文:foremast
批改:foremost
原文:knowlege
批改:knowledge
原文:and
批改:spreading
原文:is widespreaded now.
批改:删除
原文:First and foremast, the Reform and Opening up policy plays a significant role in health literacy development, because of the revenue enriching, more and more residents can adjust their budget on medical service purchase which can enable them to access to the health information easily. Furthermore, the social media on the Internet benefits residents a lot, beause huge amounts of hospitals choose to create accounts for and the knowlege of health which is used to be rare is widespreaded now. In the end, with the widespread of compulsory education, our residents are allowed to understand the medical system of our society which brings convenience to them on looking for a professional doctor and ultilizing their healthcare.
批改:以分论点的形式论述居民健康素养提升背后的原因,逻辑严谨,层次分明。
原文:To put all into the nutshell, our residents have gained this achievement of health literacy development, a The level of health literacy will increase more and our residents will harvest a better medical service in the future.
批改:总结全文,升华主题,展望未来,立意深远。
原文:a
批改:删除
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:12/15
这篇文章内容完整充实,结构清晰合理,逻辑严谨,层次分明,句型表达丰富。
词汇:考试时可以多积累高级词汇,写作文就能用上,但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误,特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。
内容:首段简洁描述图表核心数据,突出居民健康素养水平逐步提高趋势。中间段分析变化原因,包括经济发展、人民生活水平提高等,同时指出越来越多的媒体渠道获取健康知识信息,越来越注意日常健康行为。尾段强调趋势的积极意义,并提出持续发展的建议。
整体来看,作文结构完整,语言简洁,在备考时可多练习图表分析类作文,注重数据解读和逻辑表达。
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