考研英语一2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一真题每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2011年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are two tourists, sitting on a boat and throwing garbage into the river, which pollute the river. Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that environmental protection awareness is an issue that requires great attention both is our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought- provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant .First and foremost, while certain Chinese traditions may be outdated, the virtue of environmental protection is one that should never lose its luster ,as it is an essential bond that is a crucial piece in shaping the admirable character of the Chinese people. What is more, tragiclly, although the lack of clear behavioral standards might contribute to this phenomenon, its root lies in the fact that some individuals, in their pursuit of personal interest, have disregarded the virtue of environmental protection.

How can we put an end to the problem of environmental protection? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including issuing related laws and strengthening moral education. But would these measures be comprehensive enough?In reality we also need to foster the virtue of environmental protection With the support of these measures we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：pollute

批改：从句的主语 which 指的是扔垃圾的行为，此处动词要用三单形式，改为 pollutes

批改：头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图画内容, 表达的主题和图画也是贴合的

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

原文：interest

批改：interest 表示利益时，为可数名词，改为 interests 更合适

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

批改：语法正确

原文：reality

批改：加逗号

原文：protection

批改：加句号

原文： measures

批改：加逗号

批改：结尾段内容表达很好，注意标点符号的使用

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心 2.标点使用要规范。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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