考研英语二2011年大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2011年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of different contry brands in domestic car market from 2008 to

2009.In 2008, the percentage of Chinese cars was approximately 27%, but by 2009, this rate had gradually risen to around 33%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanise cars experienced a significant dicline of about 9%, during the same period. Simultaneosly,the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view,the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s car manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation,

particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustamed to draving domestic car and have become the primary consumer group.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese car brands will steadily increase in following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and

American car brands will likely continue to decrease relatively stablet.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：contry

批改：这里删除

原文：Japanise

批改：Japanese

原文：dicline

批改：decline

原文：Simultaneosly

批改：Simultaneosly

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of different contry brands in domestic car market from 2008 to 2009.In 2008, the percentage of Chinese cars was approximately 27%, but by 2009, this rate had gradually risen to around 33%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanise cars experienced a significant dicline of about 9%, during the same period. Simultaneosly,the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady.

批改：开头信息描述准确，注意单词拼写

原文： reason

批改：用复数，下面是两个理由

原文：draving

批改：driving

原文： stablet

批改：steadily

原文：The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view,the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s car manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustamed to draving domestic car and have become the primary consumer group.

批改：论点清晰

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese car brands will steadily increase in following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American car brands will likely continue to decrease relatively stablet.

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15分。

1.作文内容包含全面，主题明确，排版分为三段式；

2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，伴随状语，非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯；

4.要多内化老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，形成自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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