启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌,每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2010年考研英语一大作文批改例文中,每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正,是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。
一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目
考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文
As show in the cartoon, there is a hot pot, filled with lots of domestic and overseas culture, including Beijing Opera, Chinese Kungfu,Shakespeare,and so on. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is culture mixture that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.
This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant.First and foremost,in modern society full of changes,chances,and challenges,the knowledge of culture mixture has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people,and its significance has become increasingly evident.What is more,culture mixture holds exceptional significance for the whole world,as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for promoting culture interaction around the world,further propelling global stability.
In brief,culture mixture is the catalyst for societal and personal development,from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore,we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture.Only by doing so can we make our world shine with renewed brilliance.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:As show in the cartoon
批改:固定句式缺少成分:As is shown in the cartoon
原文:the knowledge of culture mixture
批改:“the knowledge of” 多余,直接表述 “cultural integration has become a key factor...” 更简洁
原文:As show in the cartoon, there is a hot pot, filled with lots of domestic and overseas culture, including Beijing Opera, Chinese Kungfu,Shakespeare,and so on. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is culture mixture that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.
批改:描述图片内容,符合题目要求
原文:This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant.First and foremost,in modern society full of changes,chances,and challenges,the knowledge of culture mixture has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people,and its significance has become increasingly evident.What is more,culture mixture holds exceptional significance for the whole world,as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for promoting culture interaction around the world,further propelling global stability.
批改:提出了自己的看法,使用了接连词,条理清晰
原文:In brief,culture mixture is the catalyst for societal and personal development,from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore,we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture.Only by doing so can we make our world shine with renewed brilliance.
批改:总结主旨,升华主题,内容完整
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:16
这篇关于 “文化融合” 的短文,围绕漫画内容展开分析,结构完整地呈现了 “描述漫画→分析意义→总结建议” 的论述逻辑,核心观点明确,能清晰传达 “文化融合对个人与社会具有积极作用” 的主旨,且论证层次可辨,符合议论文的基本写作框架。但是,稳重存在部分语法问题,需要再细心一些,希望继续努力,加油!
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