考研英语一2016年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2016年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语一写作冲刺备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

The cartoon provides us with a thought- provoking scene: on the left of the picture, the man , watching TV as well as smoking, says "Go to soon,my son."His son sits infront of the desk with unhappy. However,another couple of father and son in the right picture are working and studying carefully together.The intended meaning of the drawing is quite evident: at no time should the folking underestimate the significance of setting a good example.

There exist plenty of causes accounting for my opinion in various aspects. First of all, for instance, my roommat,Martin, was influenced by his father. He was passionate about reading due to his father, which brings him the capacity of writing. During this period, we all admire him. Furthermore, a rising number of individuals are coming to redization that the children"s mental health is strongly dependent on the example their parents performed for them. In the end, if we ignore the importance of setting a good example, our society and nation would confront with an unpromising and fruitless future.

To sum up, by no means should we give up our efforts to set a good example. It is imperative for the teachers to make some videos to help parents learn how to set a good example for their children . In this way, hopefully, we may have a better futher.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：soon

批改：study

原文：with unhappy

批改：unhappily

原文：folking

批改：folks

原文：The cartoon provides us with a thought- provoking scene: on the left of the picture, the man , watching TV as well as smoking, says "Go to soon,my son."His son sits infront of the desk with unhappy. However,another couple of father and son in the right picture are working and studying carefully together.The intended meaning of the drawing is quite evident: at no time should the folking underestimate the significance of setting a good example.

批改：对图画中的细节描述的很全面，但是要避免小的语言问题。

原文：roommat

批改：roommate

原文：redization

批改：realize

原文：There exist plenty of causes accounting for my opinion in various aspects. First of all, for instance, my roommat,Martin, was influenced by his father. He was passionate about reading due to his father, which brings him the capacity of writing. During this period, we all admire him. Furthermore, a rising number of individuals are coming to redization that the children"s mental health is strongly dependent on the example their parents performed for them. In the end, if we ignore the importance of setting a good example, our society and nation would confront with an unpromising and fruitless future.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：To sum up, by no means should we give up our efforts to set a good example. It is imperative for the teachers to make some videos to help parents learn how to set a good example for their children . In this way, hopefully, we may have a better futher.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误以及区分词性；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，语法基础还不错。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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