考研英语一2011年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一大作文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are two people, sitting on a boat, enjoy the scenery and throwing garbage into the water, which pollutes the river. Evidently the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that pollution the environment is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, Tragically, although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon, its root cause lives in the fact that some individuals, in their pursuit of economic interests, have disregarded. the virtue of protecton environment. what is more, environment pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image

How can we put an end to the problem of polluton environment? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including issuing related laws and strengthening the guiding role of the media. in public opinion, But would these meaures be comprehensive enough? In reality we also need to foster the virtue of protecting the environment, deliberately. whith, the support of these measure. we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：pollution

批改：改成动名词polluting

原文：s shown in the cartoon, there are two people, sitting on a boat, enjoy the scenery and throwing garbage into the water, which pollutes the river. Evidently the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that pollution the environment is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：Tragically

批改：逗号后单词小写

原文：lives

批改：lies

原文：protecton

批改：protecting

原文：what

批改：首字母大写

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, Tragically, although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon, its root cause lives in the fact that some individuals, in their pursuit of economic interests, have disregarded. the virtue of protecton environment. what is more, environment pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：polluton

批改：polluting

原文：,

批改：逗号去掉

原文：whith,

批改：With

批改：逗号

原文：measure

批改：复数

原文：How can we put an end to the problem of polluton environment? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including issuing related laws and strengthening the guiding role of the media. in public opinion, But would these meaures be comprehensive enough? In reality we also need to foster the virtue of protecting the environment, deliberately. whith, the support of these measure. we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

批改：该段能够针对图画现象提出自己的解决措施。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误，名词单复数要使用正确；句式和语法方面，注意动名词做主语。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好。继续加油。

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