考研英语一2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一作文范文每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2011年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon，there are two young peoples，sitting on the boat and throwing garbage into the water，which with polluation the river.

Evidently，the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environment pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society. First and foremost，environment pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress，not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth，but also significantly affecting its international image. What is more，tragically，although the lack of clear rules and regulations，its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals，in their pursuit of enjoy outlook，have disreparded the project environment of virtue.

How can we put an end to the problem of environment pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including enhance supervision. But would these measure be comprehensive enough? In reality，we also need to foster the virtue of project environment deliberately. With the support of these measures，we can tackle the issue.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：peoples

批改：people本身就代表复数，不用再加s

原文：with polluation

批改：which引导的非限定从里面缺谓语，改成pollutes

原文：As shown in the cartoon，there are two young peoples，sitting on the boat and throwing garbage into the water，which with polluation the river.

批改：对图画中的细节描述的很全面，但是要避免语言错误。

原文：enjoy

批改：of是介词，enjoy改成enjoying

原文：disreparded

批改：disregarded

原文：project environment of virtue.

批改：virtue of protecting environment

原文：Evidently，the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environment pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society. First and foremost，environment pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress，not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth，but also significantly affecting its international image. What is more，tragically，although the lack of clear rules and regulations，its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals，in their pursuit of enjoy outlook，have disreparded the project environment of virtue.

批改：论述的内容较为全面，运用逻辑关系词使得句与句之间衔接较为紧密。注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：enhance

批改：这里的including是介词，改成enhancing

原文：measure

批改：measures

原文：project

批改：protecting

原文：How can we put an end to the problem of environment pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including enhance supervision. But would these measure be comprehensive enough? In reality，we also need to foster the virtue of project environment deliberately. With the support of these measures，we can tackle the issue.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

论述的内容全面，字数符合作文的要求，值得表扬，希望能够注意以下的小错误。

内容上：符合题目要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图画中的内容。

词汇上：基础词汇要避免拼写错误，还要注意介词后加动词的ing形式；

句式上：能够适当运用一些高级句式，望继续保持；

语法上：需要注意定语从句的正确使用。

逻辑上：结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

修改建议：可以看出作文的内容还是比较全面的，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都比较的清晰，值得表扬。但是需要细心一些，建议养成检查的习惯，避免不必要的丢分。继续加油，再接再厉。

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