考研英语一2013年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一作文真题每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2013年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there is a group of graduates standing

on the life road and facing different choices, including going abroad, hunting a job, starting a business and taking part in Postgraduate Examinations. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to

readers that it is making a suitable decision that plays an important and positive role both in our personal life and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in serveral ways, but

two of them are particularly and significant. First and foremost, a suitable decision can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What is more, in modern society full of changes, chances and challenges, the ability of promoting personal growth has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident.

In brief, making a suitable decision is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential and fulfill our aspirations.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：serveral

批改：several

原文：life road

批改：改为life’s crossroads会好些

原文： and

批改：去掉

原文： promoting personal growth

批改：题目讲“选择的重要性、选择适合自己的道路”等等，但是“个人成长”有些不符合题目

原文： shown in the cartoon, there is a group of graduates standing on the life road and facing different choices, including going abroad, hunting a job, starting a business and taking part in Postgraduate Examinations. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is making a suitable decision that plays an important and positive role both in our personal life and in society.

批改：描述了漫画中毕业生面临多元选择的场景，提炼出 “做出合适决定具有重要积极意义” 的核心寓意

原文：In brief, making a suitable decision is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential and fulfill our aspirations.

批改： 总结观点，并呼吁支持

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/20

1.题目要求：字数符合题目要求。文章需要分析图画并表明观点，符合题目要求。

2.语言表达：语言表达清晰，没有明显语法错误和拼写错误。

3.内容层面：基本包含题目要求的内容。但是第二段内容有些偏离题目。

4.修改意见：文章整体较完整，结构较为清晰，按照描述漫画、阐述哲理和提出呼吁的顺序进行写作。没有明显语法错误和拼写错误。但是有些地方偏题了，考生在写作时要时刻注意题目要求，不要生搬硬套模板。

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