2011年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2011年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts car market percentage of various brand car. In 2008, the percentage of China brand was 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 35%. In contrast, the proportion of Japan brand experienced a significant decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remaind stable and steady.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the prmary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：car market percentage of various brand car.

批改：the percentage of car brands in Chinese car market

原文：China

批改：Chinese

原文：Japan

批改：Japanese

原文：remaind

批改：remained

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts car market percentage of various brand car. In 2008, the percentage of China brand was 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 35%. In contrast, the proportion of Japan brand experienced a significant decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remaind stable and steady.

批改：能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容，内容完整，注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：reason

批改：复数

原文：The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the prmary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，名词单复数要使用正确；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，总体来看语法基础较好。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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