2011年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二写作技巧教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of lots of brands in Chinese car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008 the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially to 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese experienced a decline of 10% during the same period. Simulaneously, the percentage of Amercian brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, our government has made, tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items.

What the future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese car brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American car brands will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：What the future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese car brands will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American car brands will likely continue to decrease.

批改：good

原文：,

批改：删除

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, our government has made, tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items.

批改：这段内容偏少

原文：lots of

批改：不合适，参考 some/ ​​various brands

原文：Japanese

批改： ​​Japanese brands​​

原文：substantially

批改：缺少谓语动词，increased​​

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of lots of brands in Chinese car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008 the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially to 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese experienced a decline of 10% during the same period. Simulaneously, the percentage of Amercian brands remained stable and steady.

批改：对图表的描述较为准确

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15分。

1.作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明，但字数偏少，第二段再多写内容；

2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，介词短语，非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯；

4.要多内化老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，形成自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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