考研英语二2011年大作文失分点批改

本文整理了2011年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语作文真题范文的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the automobile market percentages of some brands in our country in 2008 and 2009. In the 2008, the percentage of Japanese brands was 34%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially decreased to 26%. On the contrary , the percentage of domestic brands had experienced a significant increase by 5%, during the same period. Simultaneously, the proportion of American bands remained stable and steady.

The core reason for this phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundemental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by our country"s manufacturing industry in responding to the changes. What"s more, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, especially those born in 1980s and 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become primary consumer group.

What about future trends? I am confident that

the proportion of domestic cars will steadily increase in following decades, while the proportion of foreign cars will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the

批改：去掉the

原文：bands

批改：brands

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the automobile market percentages of some brands in our country in 2008 and 2009. In the 2008, the percentage of Japanese brands was 34%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially decreased to 26%. On the contrary , the percentage of domestic brands had experienced a significant increase by 5%, during the same period. Simultaneously, the proportion of American bands remained stable and ste

批改：准确描述了图表内容

原文：reason

批改：不止一个原因，用复数

原文：undemental

批改：fundamental

原文：1980s

批改：加the，特指

原文：primary

批改：加the，特指

原文：The core reason for this phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundemental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by our country"s manufacturing industry in responding to the changes. What"s more, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, especially those born in 1980s and 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become primary consumer group.

批改：信息要点清晰，注意拼写和语法错误。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars will steadily increase in following decades, while the proportion of foreign cars will likely continue to decrease.

批改：预测趋势，呼应主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，介词短语，同位语成分，和宾语从句句型很棒；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，行文流畅，内容连贯；

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