考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2017年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一作文模板教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man sitting on the sofa and sighing he has many baokes.on the contrary, there is a man ready to reading twenty bookes in this year. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that industriousness is the brush that paints a bright future, while lazinessis the shackle that hinders progress.

The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant.First and foremost, industriousness can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fullfillment thus making life rewarding and meaningful. What is more laziness not only hinders one"s sucess, but also acts as a weakness that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.

In brief，industriousness is the catalyst for social and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit, Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality, only by doing so can we fulfull our aspirations.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：aok

批改：books

原文：o

批改：大写

原文：eading

批改：ready to read

原文：okes

批改：books

原文：dustriousne

批改：感觉不是勤勉的主题，应该是 Actions speak louder than words. 行动胜于空谈。

原文：g on the sofa and sighing he has many baokes.on the contrary, there is a man ready to reading twenty bookes in this year. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that industriousness is the brush that paints a bright future, while lazinessis the shackle that hinders progre

批改：描述漫画还是比较到位的，句子结构完整，主题也还行，注意一些小错误哦。

原文：llfillme

批改：fulfillment

原文：nt

批改：后加逗号

原文：ore

批改：后加逗号

原文：ught-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant.First and foremost, industriousness can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fullfillment thus making life rewarding and meaningful. What is more laziness not only hinders one"s sucess, but also acts as a weakness that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell

批改：内容还是比较到位的，现象解释比较合理，句子结构完整，没有什么大的语法错误，注意一些小错误哦。

原文：,

批改：改为句号

原文：, o

批改：逗号改为句号，Only大写

原文：ulf

批改：fulfill

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/20

语法：语法上注意固定搭配，标点，大小写。

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的，第二段很通顺。

词汇：单词整体还行，但是写错了很多单词哦，注意一些词汇使用的适当性哦。

内容：内容比较符合英文作文写作要求，结构合理。

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