2014年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2014年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二作文真题备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in urban and rural populations in China, over a span of 20 years. In 1990, the number of urban population was approximately 300 million, but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to around 666 million. In contrast, the rural population experienced a slow decline of about 160 million during the same period.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomen is the significant progress made by China’s idustry aggregation in responding to these changes. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people’s attitude towards life have undergone significant changes. They pursue a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of urban pepuloction.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban population will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the rural population will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：a slow decline

批改：用词不当：在20年内减少1.6亿人口，这一变化的规模和速度不应被描述为“缓慢的”(slow)。这是一个非常显著的趋势，应使用 significant（显著的）或 marked（明显的）。

原文：bar chart clearly depicts the changes in urban and rural populations in China, over a span of 20 years. In 1990, the number of urban population was approximately 300 million, but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to around 666 million. In contrast, the rural population experienced a slow decline of about 160 million during the same period.

批改：本段成功抓住了图表的核心信息，数据准确，对比清晰。主要的提升空间在于表达的简洁性与用词的精准度。

原文：his phenomen is the si

批改：拼写错误 & 术语使用： phenomen 拼写错误，应为 phenomenon。 idustry 拼写错误，应为 industry。 industry aggregation（产业聚集）这个概念用得非常出色且专业，是本文的一大亮点，请务必保留并拼写正确。

原文：, people’s attitude towards life have undergone significant changes. They pursue a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of urban pepuloction.

批改：主谓不一致 & 句子残缺： 主语attitude（态度）为单数，谓语动词have应改为 has。 最后一句 This explains why... 不完整且对象错误，句子突然中断，且试图解释“城市人口”增长，但前文一直在论述“农村人口”流向城市的原因。此外，pepuloction 是 population 的拼写错误。 建议将后两句话合并并修正逻辑：This pursuit of a higher quality of life explains why an increasing number of rural residents choose to migrate to urban areas.

原文： core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomen is the significant progress made by China’s idustry aggregation in responding to these changes. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people’s attitude towards life have undergone significant changes. They pursue a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of urban pepuloction

批改：本段提出的两个论点（产业集聚和对生活质量的追求）都非常切题且具有深度，特别是“产业集聚”，体现了您对现象背后经济动因的洞察。然而，拼写错误、语法错误以及逻辑链条的断裂严重影响了这些亮点的展现。您的好想法需要准确、完整的句子来支撑。

原文： about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban population will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the rural population will likely continue to decrease.

批改：本段基于前文趋势进行预测，方向合理

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分

总体修改建议

精准第一：请务必仔细检查拼写，特别是文章中的核心术语（如phenomenon, industry, population）。这些错误最容易避免，也最影响观感。

言之有物：果断删除像“社会经历深刻转型”这类空洞的句子，将宝贵的篇幅留给像“产业集聚”这样具体、有力的论点。

逻辑闭环：确保每个解释原因的句子都是完整的，并且其结论能直接回扣到文章的主题（即农村人口向城市迁移）。

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