2014年考研英语二大作文实例分析与批改

想要在2027考研英语写作中拿到高分？研读启航教育整理的2014年考研英语二批改范例就是捷径之一。本文范文紧扣考研英语二写作技巧核心话题，从开头引入到结尾升华都做了精细打磨，是短期内快速提升考研英语写作水平的优质资源。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

This bar chart indicates the variation of the urban and rural population in China from 1990 to 2010. During the two decades, the amount of urban population, had jumped up more than a time, from 3 million to 6.66 million. While the number of the rural population had initially declined slowly for the first decade, and then declined nearly 1.3 million toward 6.74 in 2010.

Why had this kind of phenomenon occured? To start with, as a conductor orchestrating sympathy of social varity, our government delicated to push the process of civilization, including the constructing the fundemental facilities of the city, improving the educational condition and so on. What"s more, many young people from the countryside devoted to seek for the opportunity which can bring the better life condition and the enhance of vocational skills in the urban. Last but not the least, The agricultural technology in our country had obtained the immensely achievement during the twenty years so that many people in rural intended to experience the lifestyle of the city. Considering these factors above, the occurance of the phenomenon is not surprised.

So what is the tendeney for the next following decates? I think the population of the city and town will sustainably increase sharply and the population of rural will continuously get down. It is outstanding to see the changes.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Why had this kind of phenomeno

批改：态与拼写：疑问句用过去完成时 had occured 不正确，应为 did this phenomenon occur？ occured 拼写错误，是 occurred。

原文：amount of urban p

批改：用词不当：amount 用于不可数名词，population（人口）在此语境下是可数概念，应用 the number of urban residents 或直接使用 the urban population。

原文：ad jumped up more

批改：数据错误 & 表达不地道： 关键错误：图表中1990年城镇人口是300 million (3亿)，不是3 million (3百万)。6.66 million 也错了，应是 666 million (6.66亿)。数据的准确性是图表描述的基石。 jumped up more than a time 表达不自然。地道的表达是 more than doubled (翻了一倍多)。 整个句子时态为过去完成时 had jumped，但这里直接描述过去发生的事，用一般过去时 jumped 即可。

原文：While the number of the rural population had initially declined slowly for the first decade, and then declined nearly

批改：语法错误 & 数据错误： While 引导的从句缺少主句，是句子片段错误。 6.74 数据不完整，应为 674 million。

原文：as a conductor orc

批改：表达不当 & 拼写错误：这个比喻（作为指挥社会变化的交响乐 conductor）过于文学化且不准确，与图表分析文体不符。sympathy（同情）应为 symphony（交响乐），varity 应为 variety（多样性）。

原文：ur government deli

批改：拼写与用法：delicated 应为 dedicated（致力于），且 dedicated to 后面应接动名词 pushing。

原文：ncluding the constructi

批改：语法与用词：constructing 是动名词，前面应用所有格 the construction of。fundemental 拼写错误，是 fundamental（基础设施）。and so on 在学术写作中应避免，列举不完时可省略。

原文：any young people fr

批改：语法错误：devoted to 中的 to 是介词，后面应接动名词 seeking。

原文：he agricultural technolog

批改：拼写与词性：immensely 是副词，不能修饰名词 achievement，应用形容词 immense。

原文：urance of the pheno

批改：拼写与用词：occurance 拼写错误，是 occurrence。surprised（感到惊讶的）主语通常是人，应用 surprising（令人惊讶的）。

原文： had this kind of phenomenon occured? To start with, as a conductor orchestrating sympathy of social varity, our government delicated to push the process of civilization, including the constructing the fundemental facilities of the city, improving the educational condition and so on. What"s more, many young people from the countryside devoted to seek for the opportunity which can bring the better life condition and the enhance of vocational skills in the urban. Last but not the least, The agricultural technology in our country had obtained the immensely achievement during the twenty years so that many people in rural intended to experience the lifestyle of the city. Considering these factors above, the occurance of the phenomenon is not surprised.

批改：本段的三个论点（政府推动、年轻人寻求机会、农业技术进步）选择得非常贴切，逻辑上也成立，这是很大的优点！但被大量的拼写和语法错误掩盖了。

原文：what is the tendeney

批改：拼写错误：tendeney 应为 trend，decates 应为 decades。next following 意思重复，保留 next 即可。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9分

同学，你的作文最大的优势在于构建了清晰的文章结构和合理的因果逻辑。你能准确捕捉图表趋势，并且提出的三个原因（政府政策、个人发展、农业技术）都非常切题，这证明了你的分析能力！

当前，阻碍你获得更高分的主要障碍是语言的准确度，具体表现在：

关键数据错误：这是最需要避免的，会严重影响成绩。

高频拼写错误：如occurred, fundamental, dedicated, decades等。

语法细节：如介词后的动词形式(to doing)、形容词副词混淆等。

修改建议：

数据核查：写作前，花一分钟确认图表中的每一个数据，这是图表作文的命脉。

基础巩固：集中复习和记忆一批高频拼写错误的单词和固定搭配。

审阅与修改：写完初稿后，留出时间专门检查拼写、主谓一致、时态和介词用法。

规范结尾：结论段以总结为主，如果预测，使用It is likely/possible that...等谨慎的措辞。

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