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一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目
考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)
二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文
The line chart clearly depicts the market"s proportion of part brands in national automobile market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of the native brand was approximately 25%. but by 2009. this rate has significantly risen to around 20%. In contrast, the propotion of the Japan’s brand has significant decline of about 10% in the same period. Simultaneously the percentage of the American’s brand remained stable and steady.
The reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To strart with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental of this phenomenon is the significant progress created by the manufacting industry in responding to these changes. In addition, against the dropback of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using demestic aautomdbiles and has become the primary consumer group.
What about the future trends? I"m confident that the proportion of the native brand is the clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:significant decline
批改:a significant decline
原文:The line chart clearly depicts the market"s proportion of part brands in national automobile market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of the native brand was approximately 25%. but by 2009. this rate has significantly risen to around 20%. In contrast, the propotion of the Japan’s brand has significant decline of about 10% in the same period. Simultaneously the percentage of the American’s brand remained stable and steady.
批改:用具体数据描述图表内容,清晰直观,但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象
原文:dropback
批改:backdrop
原文:aautomdbiles
批改:automdbiles
原文:has
批改:have 注意主谓一致
原文:e reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To strart with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental of this phenomenon is the significant progress created by the manufacting industry in responding to these changes. In addition, against the dropback of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using demestic aautomdbiles and has become the primary consumer group.
批改:以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因,逻辑严谨,层次分明。
原文:What about the future trends? I"m confident that the proportion of the native brand is the clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades.
批改:总结全文,升华主题,展望未来,立意深远。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:13 /15
这篇文章内容完整充实,结构清晰合理,逻辑严谨,层次分明,句型表达丰富。
词汇:考试时可以多积累高级词汇,写作文就能用上,但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误,特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。
内容:在第二段分析原因时,我们可以有两个选择,一是只分析中国品牌占比上升的原因,二是可以加上日本品牌占比下降的原因,关于日本品牌占比下降的原因,可以写日本品牌一些不当行为导致其声誉下降,进而影响其销量等原因。
整体来看,主要是细节错误,但要多用自己的语言去进行表达,避免和范文重复,后续继续注重练习,加油!
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