考研英语二2011年大作文怎么写？附例文批改

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一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the market shares of some brands of the domestic car market in 2008 and in 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, the rate had substantially risen to around 31%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands experienced a significant decline of about 10%. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1980s and 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands’ market shares will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of overseas brands will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： of

批改：改为 in 更合适

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，内容表达也很好

批改：语法正确

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文： brands’ market shares

批改：前面已经有 proportion 了，此处直接写为 brands 即可

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

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