考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二真题教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar table clearly depicts the market share of part car brands in Chinese market from s 2008 to 2009. In 2008. the percentage of our natire brand was approximately 25% but by 2009. this rate had substantially risen to around 325% In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of the American brands remained stuble and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follow To start with against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic developme the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to choosaing our country"s brandss car and have become the primary consumer group. In addition. As the conducte orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government hasmade tremendous efforts to dlevelop the level of China"s manufacturing industry in vehicle allowing us to buy better car made for us.

what about future trends？I am confident that the proportion of our natire brand (is a clear sign of social improvement and) will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of the Japanese brand will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：s

批改：删除

原文：natire

批改：national

原文：The bar table clearly depicts the market share of part car brands in Chinese market from s 2008 to 2009. In 2008. the percentage of our natire brand was approximately 25% but by 2009. this rate had substantially risen to around 325% In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of the American brands remained stuble and steady.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：stuble

批改：stable

原文：follow

批改：follows 补充句号，注意断句

原文：developme

批改：development,

原文：choosaing

批改：choosing

原文：brandss

批改：删除

原文：conducte

批改：conductor

原文：hasmade

批改：空格

原文：dlevelop

批改：develop

原文：made for us

批改：删除

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follow To start with against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic developme the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to choosaing our country"s brandss car and have become the primary consumer group. In addition. As the conducte orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government hasmade tremendous efforts to dlevelop the level of China"s manufacturing industry in vehicle allowing us to buy better car made for us.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：natire

批改：national

原文：what about future trends？I am confident that the proportion of our natire brand (is a clear sign of social improvement and) will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of the Japanese brand will likely continue to decrease.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：在第二段分析原因时，我们可以有两个选择，一是只分析中国品牌占比上升的原因，二是可以加上日本品牌占比下降的原因，关于日本品牌占比下降的原因，可以写日本品牌一些不当行为导致其声誉下降，进而影响其销量等原因。

整体来看，语言表达和语法基础上，进步的空间还很大。比如本次作文中出现多次的单词拼写错误等问题，会很拉低你的平均分。另外还需要注意一些基础的语法问题和表达搭配问题，有时间好好看看文中的批改，细心吸收，争取在接下来的练习中避免类似的错误。

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