考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2011年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二作文模板话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly depicts the rate of different brand automobiles from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had risen to 33%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands and American brands experienced a decline of about 20% and 1%, respectively, during the same period.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound industry system, enabling domestic factories to have ample opportunities for further innovation. In addition, In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people’s attitudes toward purchasing automobiles have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing number of people choose Chinese brand automobiles rather than foreign brand automobiles. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese automobiles is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of foreign automobiles will likely continue to decrease .

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： the rate of different brand automobiles

批改：此处重点描述的是变化，改为 the changes in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market

批改：语法正确

原文：20%

批改：此处是 9% 左右

批改：注意数字表达的准确性，日系汽车的比例急剧下降了约 10%。与此同时，美系汽车的比例保持稳定，波动的1%应该是增长的，直接写保持平稳即可。

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也不错

原文：In

批改：此处首字母不大写

原文： brand

批改：可删去

原文：brand

批改：可删去

批改：内容表达不错，也很具体

批改：结尾段内容表达很好，预测也很合理

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心 2. 图表描写时数字表达要准确，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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