考研英语一2024年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一写作技巧每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2024年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目

考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy, standing in the park and claiming that this park near his home is beautiful. In the right-hand portrayal, the bar chart clearly depicts the number of park in this city over the past few years. In 2020, the number of park was 406, but by 2022, the figure had substantially risen to 670.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, a park holds exceptional signiticance for a nation, as it seves as a crucial cornerstone for safeguarding public. health, further propelling social stability and sustainable development. In addition, in the wake of high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer contents with mere material satisfaction, they also pursuit the health of themselves. This can explain why an increasing number of people enjoy park as a place for doing exercise. considering these factors, the dipicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

what about future? I am confident that the number of park will steadily increase in the following decades. in addition, more and more people will enjoy the benefit of park.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：ortrayal, the bar chart clearly depicts the number of park in this city over the past few years. In 2020,

批改：portrayal-> chart/graph​ (图表类文章中使用 chart或 graph更准确) the number of park-> the number of parks​ (名词复数) In 2020, the number of park was...-> 同上，应为 parks

原文： left-hand cartoon, there is a boy, standing in the park and claiming that this park near his home is beautiful. In the right-hand portrayal, the bar chart clearly depicts the number of park in this city over the past few years. In 2020, the number of park was 406, but by 2022, the figure had substantially risen to 670.

批改：​ 第一段成功地将图片和图表信息结合了起来，结构很好

原文： signiticance for a nation, as it seves as a crucial cornerstone for safeguarding public. health, further propelling social stability and sustainable development. In addition, in the wake of high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer contents with mere material satisfaction, they also p

批改：signiticance-> significance​ (拼写错误) seves-> serves​ (拼写错误) safeguarding public. health-> safeguarding public health​ (标点错误) people are no longer contents-> people are no longer content​ (content在此作形容词，意为“满足的”) they also pursuit the health-> they also pursue health​ (pursue是动词，pursuit是名词) enjoy park-> enjoy parks​ (名词复数) considering-> Considering​ (段落首字母大写) dipicted-> depicted​ (拼写错误)

原文：son for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, a park holds exceptional signiticance for a nation, as it seves as a crucial cornerstone for safeguarding public. health, further propelling social stability and sustainable development. In addition, in the wake of high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer contents with mere material satisfaction, they also pursuit the health of themselves. This can explain why an increasing number of people enjoy park as a place for doing exercise. considering these factors, the dipicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：本段从国家层面和个人层面分析原因，思路是正确的，特别是将公园与公众健康联系起来，很有见地。可以进一步提升的地方是论证的深度。第一个原因关于“国家基石”的论述略微宏大，可以更具体地联系到“公园”如何直接地造福于民（如提供休闲空间、促进社区交流），从而推动社会发展。这样能让分析更贴切。

原文：hat about future? I am confiden

批改：what-> What​ (段落首字母大写) future-> the future​ (缺少冠词) what about future?-> Regarding the future,​ (更书面的过渡词) the number of park-> the number of parks​ (名词复数) in addition-> 此处的递进关系可以更自然地融合：I am confident that... and that more and more people will enjoy the benefits of parks.

原文：future? I am confident that the number of park will steadily increase in the following decades. in addition, more and more people will enjoy the benefit o

批改：结尾段对未来做出了预测

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16

同学，你的作文结构完整，要点齐全，并且展现了一定的思考深度。当前，提升的关键在于语言的准确性，特别是名词的单复数形式、拼写和基础语法。

我为你提供一个非常具体且重要的建议：

建立“高频错误清单”。​ 请将你在练习中反复出错的点（如名词复数、content/pursue等词的用法）专门记录下来，在写作和检查时特别留意。这个小习惯能帮你迅速解决大部分基础语法问题。

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