考研英语一2013年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

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一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the drawing, there are a crowd of graduates standing on the road and choosing their future road, which concludes finding a job, studying for a higher degree, studying abroad and creating a business. Evidently, the drawing intends to convey to readers that it is making choice that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, making choice suits us brings numerous benefits to the growth of us. Its care driving force stems from graduates’ desire to step out of their comfort zones, embrace a broader future, and gain recognition from others. On the other hand, blindly following others not only hinders our success, but also acts as an Achilles" heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.

In brief, making choice suits us is the catalyst for societal and persoral development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we create a happier life.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：on the road

批改：at a crossroads更恰当

原文：road

批改：paths更合适

原文：concludes

批改：include

原文：studying for a higher degree

批改：pursuing higher education,优化一下

原文：s shown in the drawing, there are a crowd of graduates standing on the road and choosing their future road, which concludes finding a job, studying for a higher degree, studying abroad and creating a business. Evidently, the drawing intends to convey to readers that it is making choice that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：意思清楚，语言可以再优化下

原文：making choice

批改：不太自然 making a suitable choice

原文：making choice suits

批改： making a choice that suits 保持定语从句成分完整

原文：care

批改：core

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, making choice suits us brings numerous benefits to the growth of us. Its care driving force stems from graduates’ desire to step out of their comfort zones, embrace a broader future, and gain recognition from others. On the other hand, blindly following others not only hinders our success, but also acts as an Achilles" heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.

批改：论点清晰，词汇和句法丰富

原文：making choice

批改：making a choice that suits

原文：In brief, making choice suits us is the catalyst for societal and persoral development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we create a happier life.

批改：提出倡议，呼应主题

原文：persoral

批改：personal

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，强调句，倒装句和宾语从句句型很棒；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，行文流畅，内容连贯；

4. 建议：要深刻吃透老师的模板，使用自己的语言，进一步丰富自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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