考研英语二2016年大作文实例分析与批改

2016年考研英语二大作文围绕哪一类话题命题？本文精选的范文聚焦考研英语二写作技巧话题方向，结合启航教育多年考研英语二教学沉淀，从描述图表、解读寓意到发表评论三大角度，完整呈现高分作文的内在结构。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of purposes of traveling among students at a certain university.Enjoying the landscape takes lead at 37%,followed by relieving stress at 33%.Additionally factors such as making friends,cultivating independece ,and other purposes are also considered,accounting for 9%,6%,and 15% respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society universtity students are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursure spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of university students choose traveling to enjoy scenery.

In addition, as saying goes,"On life"s stage,pressure is always present ." Nowadays, university students are compelled to comfront immense academic pressure, and as a result , traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisuretme. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the Chart is

unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of purposes of traveling among students at a certain university.Enjoying the landscape takes lead at 37%,followed by relieving stress at 33%.Additionally factors such as making friends,cultivating independece ,and other purposes are also considered,accounting for 9%,6%,and 15% respectively.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：can

批改：后加be，被动

批改：加逗号断句

批改：加the

原文：re reasons for the observed phenomenon can summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society universtity students are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursure spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of university students choose traveling to enjoy scenery. In addition, as saying goes,"On life"s stage,pressure is always present ." Nowadays, university students are compelled to comfront immense academic pressure, and as a result , traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisuretme. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the Chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，注意冠词的正确使用；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意句子结构的完整，被动句不要缺少成分，还要注意正确断句；语法方面，总体来看语法基础还不错。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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