考研英语一2023年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2023年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2023年大作文题目

考研英语一2023年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay based on the picture below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2023年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there is a old woman watching the dragon boat race and tolding the old man beside me that the village competition was getting more and more lively.Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is tradition festival culture that play an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand,while certain Chinese traditions may be outdated, the quality of friendship first is one that should never lose its luster, as it is an essential bond that keeps the Chinese nation thriving.On the other hand, cooperation holds exceptional significance for a nation, as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for boosting overall national strength,further propelling social stability and sustainable development.

​ In brief, tradition festival culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture. Only by doing so can make our world shine with renewed brilliance.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：a

批改：an

原文：tolding

批改：telling

原文：me

批改：her

原文：was

批改：和前面的时态保持一致，改成is

原文：tradition festival culture

批改：traditional festival and culture

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there is a old woman watching the dragon boat race and tolding the old man beside me that the village competition was getting more and more lively.Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is tradition festival culture that play an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：对图画内容描述的很全面，且能够清晰点明主题。

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand,while certain Chinese traditions may be outdated, the quality of friendship first is one that should never lose its luster, as it is an essential bond that keeps the Chinese nation thriving.On the other hand, cooperation holds exceptional significance for a nation, as it serves as a crucial cornerstone for boosting overall national strength,further propelling social stability and sustainable development.

批改：这段论述的两点友谊第一和合作和第一段提到的中心词不一致，要保持一致才行

原文：the quality of friendship first

批改：和主题词不一致

原文：cooperation

批改：和主题词不一致

原文：tradition festival culture

批改：traditional festival and culture

原文：play

批改：plays

批改：加主语we

原文：In brief, tradition festival culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture. Only by doing so can make our world shine with renewed brilliance.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，元音开头的单词前用an修饰；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意时态一致以及主谓一致。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好，还要注意第二段的论述内容要与第一段所写的主题词一致。继续加油。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语写作模板写作提分的可靠方案。