考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2011年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二真题话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the market proportion of a part of auto brands in China in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had risen to around 33%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands experienced a decline of about 8% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s automobile manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in 1980s and 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic automobiles and have become the primary consumer group .

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese brands of auto is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the follow decades. In contrast, the proportion of overseas auto brands will likely continue to decrease relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：market proportion

批改：要么写为 market shares, 要么直接写为 proportion

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

原文：a part of auto brands in China

批改："A part of" 通常用于表示一个整体中的一部分（如 a part of the car 汽车的一个部件），与 brands 连用并不合适，此处改为 certain brands in the domestic car market

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，内容表达也很好

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文： of auto

批改：删去

原文：relatively stable

批改：形容词短语不能修饰动词，删去

批改：结尾段内容表达不错

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心 ，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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