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一、2023年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2023年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe and interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2023年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The line clearly depicts the Chinese people"s health situation from 2012 to 2021. In 2012, the percentage was 8.80% ,but by 2016, this rate had gradually risen to 11.58%.In contrast,the proportion experienced a significant increase of 12.92% from 2016 to 2021.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with, as we all know, the outbreak of COVID-19 has impected every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choices. Consequently, an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health. In addition, as the counductor orchestraing the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound health system, enabling people to have healthy body. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising
what about future trends, I am confident that the proportion of healthy commonsence will steadily increase in the following decades.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:line
批改:应为 the line chart
原文:g
批改:分点展开论述,条理清晰,论述角度符合要求,整体语言表达通顺流畅。
原文:w
批改:应大写
原文:healthy commonsence
批改:可以用题干上给出的health literacy
批改:结合数据对未来发展趋势做出了合理预测,符合要求;逻辑合理充分
批改:阐述了题干数据,契合题意,符合要求;
原文:impected
批改:impacted
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:10
评语:全文架构清晰明确,具备一定的衔接手段,逻辑合理的当;语言表达通顺流畅;内容上,中间段落具有一定说服力,理由清晰,可以加入一些更深度的分析。继续加油!
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