考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大,一直是2015年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二写作冲刺话题,给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文,文中不仅有逐句批注,还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。
一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of expenditure on spring holiday among residents in certain city of China. New Year gifts take the lead at 40%, followed by transportation, gathering and eatting, and other spendings at 20%, respectively.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace, allowing them to afford New Year gifts that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of people choose to travel and gather during the spring holiday. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of residents, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of residents, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.
批改:good,回扣主题,首尾呼应
原文:certain
批改:加a
原文:eatting
批改:eating
原文:The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of expenditure on spring holiday among residents in certain city of China. New Year gifts take the lead at 40%, followed by transportation, gathering and eatting, and other spendings at 20%, respectively.
批改:准确描述了图表内容
原文:spring
批改:首字母大写Spring Festival
原文:The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace, allowing them to afford New Year gifts that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of people choose to travel and gather during the spring holiday. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising
批改:论据充分,词汇和语法结构丰富
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:13/15分。
1.作文内容包含全面,主题明确,层次分明,考试使保持这样的结构;
2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇,定语从句,非谓语结构和宾语从句变化使用,体现了英语水平;
3.采用恰当的衔接手法,内容较为连贯,老师评卷时会非常喜欢;
4.根据自己的基础,要多内化老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型,写作和背诵相结合,形成自己的语料库和写作思路,加油!
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