考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2011年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二写作技巧话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in the market shares of certain brands in the domestic cars from 2008 to 2009.In 2008,the proportion of domestic cars was approximately 25%,but in 2009,this rate had substantially risen to around 33%.In contrast,the proportion of Japanese cars experienced a significant decline of about 10% at the same period.Simultaneously,the proportion of American cars remaned stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.First of foremost,Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation.In my view,the significant progress was made by China’s automoive industry in responding to these changes.What’s more,against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development,the younger generation,particularly born in 1990s and 2000s,was accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumers.Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon is unsurprising.

What’s about the future trends?I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars will steadily increase in the following ten years.In contrast,the proportion of Japanese and American cars will likely continue to decrease.

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文：domestic

批改：国产品牌可以表述标准一点，改为domestic brand

原文：domestic

批改：同前文，domestic brand

原文：in

批改：后面用的是过去完成时，这里应该用介词 by

原文：Japanese

批改：同前文，Japanese brand

原文：American

批改：同前文，American brand

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in the market shares of certain brands in the domestic cars from 2008 to 2009.In 2008,the proportion of domestic cars was approximately 25%,but in 2009,this rate had substantially risen to around 33%.In contrast,the proportion of Japanese cars experienced a significant decline of about 10% at the same period.Simultaneously,the proportion of American cars remaned stable and steady.

批改：对图表的描述比较全面，注意个别表达可以优化

原文：of

批改：and

原文：automoive

批改：automotive

原文：1990s

批改：前面要加定冠词the

原文：was

批改：用一般现在时即可，应改为are

原文：domestic

批改：同前文，domestic brand

原文：’s

批改：多余，应删除

原文：Japanese and American

批改：同前文，后面补充brand

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.First of foremost,Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation.In my view,the significant progress was made by China’s automoive industry in responding to these changes.What’s more,against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development,the younger generation,particularly born in 1990s and 2000s,was accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumers.Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon is unsurprising.

批改：从产业进步和消费者偏好两个角度分析国产品牌汽车占比上升的原因，注意介词、主谓一致等语法问题

原文：What’s about the future trends?I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars will steadily increase in the following ten years.In contrast,the proportion of Japanese and American cars will likely continue to decrease.

批改：表达个人观点，I am confident that前面加一个状语会更完善，比如“基于国内科技水平的持续进步，”

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/15

题目要求：对图表内容表述清晰全面；个人观点及论述内容符合题意；结尾可以再优化下；

语言表达：全文用了较多的模板句，但也有一些语法问题和拼写错误，表达上还有进步的空间。练习阶段也可以多用自己的语言表达，语法水平提升后再套用模板效果更好；

行文逻辑：第一段描述题干内容，第二段给出详细论述，第三段表达观点，架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；优化文章结尾 ；继续积累经典句式；加强语法练习；

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