考研英语二2016年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2016年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二作文范文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

According to the chart. it can be seen that the percentage of develop independence, make friends and others accounts for 6%, 9% and 15%, enjoy the scenery ranks the first and reduce stress ranks the second. The chart"s information can be employed to conclude the following: college students have various reasons for traveling, and travel can help them in some aspects.

Several factors can account for this viewpoint. To begin with, for instance, my friends were interested in travel, because they think travel has a lot of benefits that it can help them in some aspects. What"s more, the majority of people believe that travel will provide them with a broader platform to relax themselves, which may put them in a comfortable state in life. Last but not least,it is well known that physical and mental health are strongly dependent on travel time.

It is not difficult to draw the conclusion that enough attention must be turned to travel by ourselves and our community. For one thing, mass media, such as radios, televisions, newspapers and the Internet, should encourage people to travel. For another, parents and children can travel together to strengthen their relationship. In this way, we may have a much more wonderful life.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：develop

批改：developing

原文：make

批改：making

原文：enjoy

批改：enjoying 动名词作主语

原文：reduce

批改：reducing

原文：According to the chart. it can be seen that the percentage of develop independence, make friends and others accounts for 6%, 9% and 15%, enjoy the scenery ranks the first and reduce stress ranks the second. The chart"s information can be employed to conclude the following: college students have various reasons for traveling, and travel can help them in some aspects.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观

原文：dependent

批改：strengthened

原文：on

批改：during

原文：Several factors can account for this viewpoint. To begin with, for instance, my friends were interested in travel, because they think travel has a lot of benefits that it can help them in some aspects. What"s more, the majority of people believe that travel will provide them with a broader platform to relax themselves, which may put them in a comfortable state in life. Last but not least,it is well known that physical and mental health are strongly dependent on travel time.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：t is not difficult to draw the conclusion that enough attention must be turned to travel by ourselves and our community. For one thing, mass media, such as radios, televisions, newspapers and the Internet, should encourage people to travel. For another, parents and children can travel together to strengthen their relationship. In this way, we may have a much more wonderful life.

批改：总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

首段总体概括图表主题，详细列出关键数据变化；第二段分析原因，可从社会就业压力增大、学生追求自我实现等方面进行论述；第三段评论与展望，预测未来趋势可能持续，并强调其对个人和社会发展的积极意义。

文章整体来说，言简意赅，符合了考试写作提纲的要求，文章表示语义衔接的词语运用不太多，在以后的写作中可以多尝试使用一些表示衔接的词语，这样文章段落内部句内和段落之间的关系就能很明朗的表现出来。同时注意避免单纯罗列数据，可适当引用社会现象或政策背景支持分析，增强说服力。

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