启航教育在考研英语写作教学中反复强调:词汇与句式的高级化是考研英语作文高分的关键。本文整理的2011年考研英语二批改范例,几乎每一段都包含高分替换词与衔接词,是考研英语二作文范文写作锦囊中的代表性范文。
一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目
考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)
二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depicts market share of car market in the country. In 2008, the percentage of Japanse brand was approximately 35%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially decreased to around 25%. In contrast,the proportion of domestic brand experienced significantly increase of about 8% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the youngergeneration, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition. Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundarmental reasons for the phenomenon is the significant progress mode by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considered these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurpising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following deades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanse cars will likely continue to decrease.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:the
批改:our
原文:Japanse
批改:Japanese
原文:The bar chart clearly depicts market share of car market in the country. In 2008, the percentage of Japanse brand was approximately 35%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially decreased to around 25%. In contrast,the proportion of domestic brand experienced significantly increase of about 8% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.
批改:能够准确地描绘出图表的信息,句子连贯完整。
批改:逗号
原文:fundarmental
批改:fundamental
原文:reasons
批改:单数
原文:Considered
批改:considering
原文:The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the youngergeneration, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition. Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundarmental reasons for the phenomenon is the significant progress mode by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considered these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurpising.
批改:能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义,能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子,使得句与句之间衔接连贯,望继续保持。
原文:deades
批改:decades
原文:What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following deades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanse cars will likely continue to decrease.
批改:分析并预测了未来的趋势,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:10/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误,名词单复数要使用正确;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变,但是要注意正确断句;语法方面,总体来看语法基础较好。
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的很认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。一定要细心一些,注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。
对每一位2027考研人而言,考研英语二作文范文都是冲刺阶段必须攻克的难关。启航教育陪伴一届又一届学子走向考研英语写作高分,本文精解的2011年考研英语二范文正是经典参考之一。欢迎关注启航教育,了解更多考研英语备考干货。
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