对于考研英语一而言,2013年大作文常以图画形式呈现。本文精解的这篇图画批改范例,启航教育老师逐句解读图画细节、寓意提炼与评论展开三步走,是考研英语作文话题图画作文的经典教学样本。
一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目
考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文
As is vividly illustrated in the cartoon above,in front of us stand many people,excited as well as ambitious,facing many choices。The primary intention of the drawing is to remind us that make a right choice is so significant that the phenomenon deserves the highest level of attention and consideration
There are plenty of elements to account for my viewpoint。Fistly,the majority of individuals maintain that go abroad will provide them with a broader platform to enhance themselves,which may put them in a beneficial position in the future。Secondly,for instance,my roommate found a job early,which expand him horizons。During this period,all of us admire his capacity。Thirdly,Definitely no one can deny such an obvious fact that strat a business play a vital role in personal growth。
All in all,it is not difficult to draw the conclusion that enough attention must be turned to make the right choice by ourselves。In this way,hopefully,we may have a better future
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:make a right choice
批改:动词原形 make不能直接作主语。改为 making ...
原文:Fistly
批改:单词拼写错误,改为 Firstly
原文: go
批改:动词原形 go不能作主语。应用动名词形式。改为 going
原文:expand
批改:关系代词 which指代整句话,谓语动词应用第三人称单数,改为 expands
原文:him
批改:应该用物主代词 ,改为 his
原文:strat
批改:单词拼写错误,改为 start 动词短语不能作主语,要用动名词作主语,改为 starting
原文: play
批改:动名词作主语,谓语动词用单数,改为 plays
原文: attention must be turned to
批改:固定短语 pay attention to ,所以改为 attention must be paid to...
原文:in front of us stand many people,excited as well as ambitious,facing many choices。
批改:运用完全倒装,句式丰富
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:16 /20
从结构层面看,本文脉络清晰,三段式写作,开头清楚表明图片,中间进行分析,最后做出总结。
语言层面上,语法错误较多,但是句式丰富。
问题集中在主谓一致、动词短语不能做主语,动名词才能作主语、宾格形式和物主代词、固定短语,一些用词不够准确或地道。大量仿写范文,并特别注意文中的固定搭配和常用表达,通过模仿来提升语感。继续练习,您的写作会越来越流畅地道!
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