作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2016年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语二真题常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目
考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.
二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文
The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the purpose why students in collage travel.Enjoying the beauty takes the lead at 37%,followed by releasing their stress at 33%.Additionally ,factors such as establishing the ability to solve problem by oneself , build new friendship and other more are also considered, accounting for 6%,9% and 15%,respectively.
The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with,in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,people’s attitudes towards of travelling have undergone significant changes.This explains why students in collage have diverse kinds of reason for stepping out of the campus and enjoying the natural environment. In addition,an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes , challenges and chance,it is studying at society and try to improve oneself in multiple aspects that is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in long run.
What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of college students,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文: collage
批改:college
原文:Enjoying the beauty
批改:Appreciating scenery
原文:establishing the ability to solve problem by oneself
批改:cultivating problem-solving skills
原文:build new friendship
批改:应该和前面的-ing形式并列,building
原文:other more
批改:other reasons或者others
原文:of
批改:删掉of,已经有介词towards了
原文:collage
批改:college
原文: reason
批改:用复数reasons
原文:chance
批改:用复数chances
原文: in long run
批改:固定搭配 in the long run
原文:What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of college students,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.
批改:结尾部分没有问题
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:10/15
题目要求:文章完整地完成了两个核心指令:1) 解读图表,清晰地列出了各项旅行目的的占比;2) 给出了评论,分析了现象背后的原因。
语言表达:词汇量较为丰富,能够使用一些高级词汇和复杂句式,但是文章中有拼写错误需要留意。
行文逻辑:文章按照描述图表、分析原因、预测未来的顺序展开,结构清晰。从描述图表到分析原因,再到预测未来,文章中的过渡较为自然。
建议:关于文章内出现的拼写错误和语法漏洞需要留心,每次写完之后养成通篇读一遍的习惯,在读的过程中就专注抓语法错误、拼写错误,一句话里的时态是否统一,名词的单复数是否正确以及是否应该加冠词。这些不必要犯的错误一定要扼杀掉!建议同学多练习积累手感和语感,一定要坚持自己写作文,自己写完之后再去借鉴范文,学习范文的优秀表达,这样会更快提升,能在正式考试中根据不同的题目要求写出更切题的文章。继续加油(ง •_•)ง,相信你一定能成功,Go Go!
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