2021年考研英语二大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

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一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the methods of sports of residents in certain city. Sporting lonely takes the lead at 54. 3%, followed by Sporting with friends at47. 7%. Additionally, factors such as Sporting with family and the community of sports account for 23. 9%and15. 8%, respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present ＂. The people are compelled to confront immense life"s pressure, and as a result, Sporting lonely has emerged as their significant choices for their free time. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build many playgrounds and gyms, enabling people to sport with friends, family, and take part in the organization of sports.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of residents , serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：in certain ci

批改：in certain city 前应加上冠词 a certain city

原文：art clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the methods of sports of residents in certain city. Sporting lonely takes the lead at 54. 3%, followed by Sporting with friends at47. 7%. Additionally, factors such as Sporting with family and the community of sports account for 23. 9%and15. 8%, respectively.

批改：你准确地列出了所有数据，并指出了最主要的趋势

原文：ore reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present ＂. The people are compelled to confront immense life"s pressure, and as a result, Sporting lonely has emerged as their significant choices for their free time. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build many playgrounds and gyms, enabling people to sport with friends, family, and take part in the organization of sports.

批改：第一个论点（生活压力）与“独自运动”的关联建立得非常好，逻辑是通的。 第二个论点的比喻 as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes 非常精彩，是本文的亮点！这个表达形象且高级。 但此论点的结论 enabling people to... 只解释了“与朋友/家人/团队”运动，却没有回应第一段“独自运动”占主导的现象，论证上出现了偏差。可以稍作调整，使其也支持“独自运动”，例如说明公共设施也为个人锻炼提供了便利和空间。

原文：porting lonely has emerged as their significant choices for their free time. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous e

批改：Sporting lonely 应改为 Exercising alone。 their significant choices 中，主语是单数 Exercising alone，表语应为 a significant choice。 sport with friends 中，sport 作动词不妥，可改为 exercise with friends。 the organization of sports 表意模糊，可改为更清晰的 organized team sports。

原文：out future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of residents , serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：展望段落的结论合理，语言也有亮点

原文：hoice of re

批改：the choice 应改为复数 the choices，以对应居民们的多种选择。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11

主要优点：

结构完整清晰：文章框架工整，段落功能明确。

语言有闪光点：能够创造出“conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes”和“microcosm of the era”这样极具文采的比喻和表达，显示了你的语言天赋和积累。

论证有想法：从“生活压力”切入的角度是合理且贴近现实的。

核心提升点：

当前最主要的提升空间在于：

基础词汇的精准运用：需要确保核心概念（如alone/lonely）和常用动词（如exercise/sport）的准确使用。

论证的针对性：确保每一个论据都直接支撑你想要解释的图表现象，避免偏离。

格式与细节：注意数据书写的规范性。

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