2021年考研英语一大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2021年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、2021年考研英语一大作文题目

考研英语一2021年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below. In your essay, you should1)describe the picture briefly, 2)interpret the implied meaning, and 3)give your comments. Write your answer on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、2021年考研英语一大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are two people talking about the meaning about singing opera. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that pursing interests is the brush that paints a bright future, while paying attention to other words is the shackle that hinders their progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. Devoted to oneself business could ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fuillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful. The bad emotion is like a heavy chain that hinders people"s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing from them shining brightly in future society.

In berief, consistent is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of keeping negative emotion becase of other people"s words to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there are two people talking about the meaning about singing opera. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that pursing interests is the brush that paints a bright future, while paying attention to other words is the shackle that hinders their progress.

批改：描述漫画内容，揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理，清晰直观。

原文：other

批改：others"

原文：oneself

批改：one"s own

原文：fuillment

批改：fulfillment

原文：preventing from them

批改：preventing them from

原文：berief

批改：brief

原文：consistent

批改：consistency

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. Devoted to oneself business could ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fuillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful. The bad emotion is like a heavy chain that hinders people"s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing from them shining brightly in future society.

批改：以分论点的形式论述坚持自我的重要性，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：stays

批改：stay

原文：In berief, consistent is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of keeping negative emotion becase of other people"s words to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16/20

作文对漫画的理解到位，写作思路紧扣主题，有些短语句式的表达也不错，基本能够传达清楚作者的写作意图，但在以下几方面还需注意：

细节：作文中有几处比较明显的拼写错误。考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：本文可以从以下多个角度入手展开：坚持做自己喜欢的事情、自信、独立思考、不盲从、父母正确鼓励孩子等，用人生观的角度，都比较好展开；但如果只写传统文化，未涉及上述内容，就偏题了。

整体来看，作文理解了漫画内涵，段落框架明确，大体上与题目要求保持一致，但是在表达上还存在一定问题。从点评中可以看出作文中有一些表述不当之处，基本是由汉语思维习惯而造成的表达错误，主要体现在词汇使用和搭配不当。后续继续注重练习，加油！

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语写作模板写作提分的可靠方案。