考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2011年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二写作冲刺话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of certain brands int the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic cars was approximately 26%, but by 2009, this rate has substantially risen to around 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanse cars experienced a significant decline of about 9% from 2008 to 2009. Simultaneously, the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summaried as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularlythose born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to buying domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by Chain"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

Whar about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic carswill steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of other cars will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：int

批改：in

原文： has

批改：2008-2009年，要用过去完成时had

原文：Japanse

批改：Japanese

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of certain brands int the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic cars was approximately 26%, but by 2009, this rate has substantially risen to around 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanse cars experienced a significant decline of about 9% from 2008 to 2009. Simultaneously, the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady.

批改：对图表的描述较为全面，注意时态和拼写的准确性

原文：summaried

批改：summarized

原文：particularly

批改：后加空格

原文：are

批改：主语是the younger generation，谓语应该用is

原文：Chain

批改：China

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summaried as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularlythose born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to buying domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by Chain"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：从消费者偏好和行业进步两个层面分析国产汽车品牌占比上升的 原因，注意个别语法问题和拼写问题

原文：Whar

批改：What

原文：cars

批改：后加空格

原文：Whar about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic carswill steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of other cars will likely continue to decrease.

批改：表达个人观点，注意拼写和空格

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

题目要求：对漫画内容描绘全面准确，个人观点及论述内容符合题意；

语言表达：全文用了较多的模板局 ，但也有一些语法错误和拼写错误，表达效果有待提高。如果目前还不能准确使用例句，也可以尝试用自己的语言表达，锻炼下语法水平；

行文逻辑：第一段描述题干内容，第二段详细论述，第三段表达观点，整体架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；继续多多积累经典句式；提升语法水平；提高单词拼写的准确性；

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