考研英语二2016年大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2016年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文话题写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

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The pie chart shows the results of a survey on college students" travel purposes. It clearly presents the different motivations behind students" travel activities.

Among all purposes, “enjoying scenery" takes the largest proportion at 37 percent, followed by “ relieving pressure" which accounts for 33 “ percent. Other purposes include "making friends" (9 percent), “cultivating independence" (6 percent), and "others" (15 percent).

These data reflect college students" needs: they seek both spiritual relaxation (scenery) appreciation and pressure relief) and personal development (social interaction and independence cultivation). This trend shows that students view travel as a way to balance academic stress and self-growth, which is a positive and rational choice for their overall well-being.

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The pie chart shows the results of a survey on college students" travel purposes. It clearly presents the different motivations behind students" travel activities. Among all purposes, “enjoying scenery" takes the largest proportion at 37 percent, followed by “ relieving pressure" which accounts for 33 “ percent. Other purposes include "making friends" (9 percent), “cultivating independence" (6 percent), and "others" (15 percent).

批改：详细地描述了图表的内容，句子结构完整

批改：加逗号

原文：These data reflect college students" needs: they seek both spiritual relaxation (scenery) appreciation and pressure relief) and personal development (social interaction and independence cultivation). This trend shows that students view travel as a way to balance academic stress and self-growth, which is a positive and rational choice for their overall well-being.

批改：能够分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意正确使用标点断句；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。

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