2013年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2013年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

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48. The bar chart clearly displaus the percentage break-down of students" situations of doing part-time jobs in a certain university. The percentage of senior students takes the lead at 88.24%, followed by the percentage o-f junior students at 71.93%. Additionally, factors such as the percentage of sophomore students and freshmen are also considered, accounting for 71.13% and 67.77%, respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, students" attitude towards doing part-time jobs have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing number of senior students choose to do part-time jobs. In addition, an increasing nu-mher of young people believe that in mordern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, working experience is indispensable if the wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenor in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that above st-atistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文：laus

批改：depicts

原文：" situations of

批改：这两个单词可以删掉的，直接 students doing即可

原文：me jobs in a certain university. The percentage of senior students takes the lead at 88.24%, followed by the percentage o-f junior students at 71.93%. Additionally, factors such as the percentage of sophomore students and freshmen are also considered, accounting for 71.13% and 67.77%, respectively

批改：第一段描述图表数据比较准确，句子整体用的不错，没有什么大的问题哦，内容比较贴合主题。能看出来最后一句话根据其他作文范文改写的，放在这里比较通顺，也能说的通。

原文：ude

批改：加s

原文：u-mh

批改：number

原文：order

批改：modern

原文：he

批改：they

原文：enomenor i

批改：phenomenon

原文：e core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, students" attitude towards doing part-time jobs have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing number of senior students choose to do part-time jobs. In addition, an increasing nu-mher of young people believe that in mordern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, working experience is indispensable if the wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenor in the chart is unsurprisin

批改：第二段分点写比较有逻辑性，内容比较详实丰富，语法和词汇没有什么大的问题，注意一些词汇的正确书写，能看出来是粗心导致的哦，下次要细心哦。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

语法：语法上注意单复数哦。

词汇：拼错的单词不少，要细心哦。对词汇要加强记忆。

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的，读起来比较顺畅。

内容：三段结构可以的，字数和内容分配的很均衡，第二段分点写很有逻辑性。

未来可期，继续加油吧。

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