考研英语一2017年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2017年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand, there is a men, sitting on the chair and saying: I have a lot of books. On the contrary, in the right-hand, there is a men, sitting front of desk and saying seriously: I will try my best to finish reading twentybooks this year. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that us thinkt dream is the brush that paints a bright furture, while daydream is the shackle that hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provo provoking in severall ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, dream can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What"s more, daydream is not only merely a chronic poison that stifles potential, but also the Achilles neel many youth. It silently erodes opportunties while warping the ladder of ascent into a self-destructive slide,

In bbrief, dream is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practive, we shoulda additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydream to ensure our growth stays on course

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：eft-hand, there is a men, sitting on the chair and saying: I have a lot of books. On the contrary, in the right-hand, there is a men, sitting front of desk and saying seriously: I will try my best to finish reading twentybooks this year. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that us thinkt dream is the brush that paints a bright furture, while daydream is the shackle that hinders progress.

批改：​ 本段清晰地描述了两幅图的对比，并成功提炼了核心寓意。开篇点题做得很好

原文：he left-hand, there is a men, sitting on the chair and saying: I have a lot of books. On the contrary, in the right-hand, there is a men, sitting front of desk and saying seriously: I will try my best to finish reading tw

批改：In the left-hand-> In the left-hand picture（补充完整）。 a men-> a man（“men”是复数，单数是“man”）。 sitting front of desk-> sitting in front of a desk（固定搭配）。 twentybooks-> twenty books（分开书写）。

原文： furture,

批改：furture-> future（拼写修正）。

原文：phenomenon is thought-provo provoking in severall ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, dream can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What"s more, daydream is not only merely a chronic poison that stifles potential, but also the Achilles neel many youth. It silently erodes opportunties while warping the ladder of ascent into a self-destructive slide,

批改： 本段采用正反对比论证，结构清晰。主要的提升空间在于让第一个论点的阐述与漫画中的“行动”结合得更紧密，使论证更具针对性。

原文：hought-provo provoking in severall ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, dream can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What"s

批改：thought-provo provoking-> thought-provoking（拼写修正）。 severall-> several（拼写修正）。 Achilles neel-> Achilles" heel（“致命弱点”的固定表达）。 opportunties-> opportunities（拼写修正）。

原文：brief, dream is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practive, we shoulda additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydream to ensure our growth stays on course

批改：​ 结论段从正反两方面总结，结构完整。很好地完成了任务。

原文： bbrief, dream is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practive, we shoulda additionally, we must be acutely awa

批改：bbrief-> In brief（拼写修正）。 practive-> practice（拼写修正）。 we shoulda additionally-> additionally, we should（修正拼写和结构）。 cours-> course（拼写修正）

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15

同学，你的作文审题准确，结构工整，特别是比喻修辞和对比论证的运用非常出彩，这为你获取高分奠定了很好的基础！

如果希望在现有的好基础上追求卓越，我们可以聚焦于核心概念的精准表达和论证的聚焦度：

确保概念表述准确：将寓意句中的核心概念（如 thinkt dream）明确为更标准的书面语表达（如 pursuing a dream），能立刻提升文章的严谨度。

夯实语法与拼写基础：文中有一些拼写错误。完成写作后，留出几分钟快速检查一遍，能有效提升文章的规范性。

让论证紧扣行动：在阐述“梦想”的益处时，可以更紧密地结合漫画中的“计划阅读”这一具体行动，说明梦想通过行动如何带来成长，使论证更具针对性。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语作文批改写作提分的可靠方案。