考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一作文模板每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2017年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy, lying in a chair, and saying “I have lots of books.” on the controry, in the right hand portrayal, another boy, reading a book, and intending to read twenty books at this year. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future, while daydream is the shackle that hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, being practical can ignite our creativity our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, daydream is not only merely a chronic poison that stifles potential, but also the Achilles" heel of many youth, It is silently erodes opportunities while warping the ladder of ascent into a self-destructive slide

In brief, being practical is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benifit. Therefore, we should activily support and advocate this quality we should actively promote and carry forward traditio culture; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effect of daydream to ensure our growth stays on course

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：on

批改：首字母大写

原文：controry

批改：contrary

原文：right hand

批改：right-hand加连字符

原文：,

批改：加谓语is

原文：at

批改：in

原文：daydream

批改：daydreaming动名词做主语

原文：In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy, lying in a chair, and saying “I have lots of books.” on the controry, in the right hand portrayal, another boy, reading a book, and intending to read twenty books at this year. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future, while daydream is the shackle that hinders progress.

批改：能够完整描述出图画中的内容，语言连贯，注意避免小的语言问题。

批改：加and

原文：daydream

批改：daydreaming

原文：,

批改：句号

原文：is

批改：多余删去

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, being practical can ignite our creativity our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, daydream is not only merely a chronic poison that stifles potential, but also the Achilles" heel of many youth, It is silently erodes opportunities while warping the ladder of ascent into a self-destructive slide

批改：能够通过正反两方面进行论述来突出论点，能够运用逻辑关系词，使得句子之间衔接较为连贯。

原文：benifit

批改：benefit

原文：activily

批改：actively

原文：we should actively promote and carry forward traditio culture

批改：与主题无关，删去

原文：In brief, being practical is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benifit. Therefore, we should activily support and advocate this quality we should actively promote and carry forward traditio culture; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effect of daydream to ensure our growth stays on course

批改：该段再次总结强调写作的中心，起到了点题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯，注意正确使用标点断句；语法方面，注意动名词做主语以及一句话只能有一个谓语。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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