考研英语一2016年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一真题每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2016年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon,there is a man, lying in a sofa, smoking, watching TV and asking his son to study hard. On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, a father is studying with his son together. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that a positive example is the brush that paints a great future, while negative examples are the shackle that hinders progress.

The phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, the power of positive examples can ignite children creativity, promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making us rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, the influence of negative examples is like a heavy chain that hinders children’s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief,a good example is a catalyst for children"s development, from which we all stand to benefit. We should actively support and advocate this practice. Additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of negative examples to ensure children"s growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：n the right-hand portrayal, a father is studying with his son together. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that a positive example is the brush that paints a great future, while negative examples are the shackle that hinders progress.

批改：写的不错，描述漫画非常到位，句子结构完整，主题找的比较贴切题目，句式多样，读起来很通顺。

原文：veral ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, the power of positive examples can ignite children creativity, promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making us rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, the influence of negative examples is like a heavy chain that hinders children’s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in future societ

批改：原因分析和现象解释比较适当，透彻，句子结构符合英文写作要求。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17/20

语法：语法没有什么问题。

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的，整体很通顺。

词汇：单词整体还行。

内容：内容比较符合题意要求，结构合理。

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