考研英语一2013年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2013年考研英语一备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语一真题话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语一高分写作模板。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there is a group of graduates, standing at the crossroads and facing their different life choices, including job-hunting, taking part in the postgraduate entrance examination, going abroad and so on. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is an appropriate choice that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, an appropriate choice can nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. What is more, in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, an appropriate choice has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident. It further propels social stability and sustainable development. On the contrary, a wrong choice is like a heavy chain that hinders their progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life, and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, choosing appropriately is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should choose carefully when we face different choices. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential and make our life shine with renewed brilliance. Lastly, I hope that every graduate will choose one suitable road.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：at the crossroads

批改：改为 at the crossroads of life 表达更完整

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图画内容, 表达的主题和图画也是贴合的

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文： road

批改：包含比喻的意味时，更常用 path

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：不存在语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：细节表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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