考研英语一2017年大作文失分点批改

2017年考研英语一大作文是考研英语作文模板备考清单中的必练题型。本文带来的高分批改范例，配套启航教育老师的逐句批注与预测话题标签，适合考研英语考生在冲刺阶段精读精练，是一套完整的写作提升资料。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man, laying on a chair and facing a lot of books and saying:" I have many books.”On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, a man is reading a book and planing to read 20 books this year.Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is taking actions that plays an important and positive role both in our personal life and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,taking actions can ignite cur creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillmen, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming.On the other hand, neglecting the importance of taking actions is like a heavy chain that hinders young people"s progress, leaving them with a wrong outlook on life, preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, taking action is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore we should actively support and advocate this practice.Only by doing so can we fulfill our aspirations.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：laying

批改：“lying”（“躺” 的现在分词为 “lying”）

原文：planing

批改：“planning”

原文：cur

批改：our

原文：self-fulfillmen

批改：“self-fulfillment”

原文：Therefore

批改：后面逗号

原文：In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man, laying on a chair and facing a lot of books and saying:" I have many books.”On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, a man is reading a book and planing to read 20 books this year.Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is taking actions that plays an important and positive role both in our personal life and in society.

批改：描述图片内容，符合题目要求

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,taking actions can ignite cur creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillmen, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming.On the other hand, neglecting the importance of taking actions is like a heavy chain that hinders young people"s progress, leaving them with a wrong outlook on life, preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

批改：提出了自己的观点，使用了表示逻辑关系的连接词，条理较为清晰

原文：In brief, taking action is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore we should actively support and advocate this practice.Only by doing so can we fulfill our aspirations.

批改：总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16

原文紧扣 “空谈 vs 实干”（藏书不读 vs 计划读书）的图画核心，框架完整，符合考研英语大作文的基本要求。但存在一些问题：语法 / 拼写错误（如 “laying”“planing”“cur”），写完整体检查一遍，希望继续努力，加油！

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