考研英语一2013年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2013年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

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As shown in the picture, Chinese college

graduates usually have four major choices:

participating in Postgraduate Entrance Exams,

seeking for jobs, going abroad for further study,

setting up one"s own company. Of course, the

artist intends to provoke a discussion about the

merits and demerits of each choice.

As is universally acknowledged, one is never too

old to learn. Consequently, a large number of graduates choose to further their study either in China or abroad. It means being armed with more

knowledge and expertise, but lacking work

experience. Looking for a job after one"s

graduation helps with enlarging the social circle

and being more independent, but with a relatively low academic degree, it is difficult for them to

achieve a promotion and a salary increase

compared with those who have higher degree.

Starting a business sounds like a wise choice as it sharpens one"s capablities in all aspects and may accumulate some wealth gradually; nevertheless, it may also lead to substantial financial losses,

leaving young people deeply in debt at an early

age and bringing great pressure to their lives.

In my opinion, none of the choices is flawless. Every college students should figure out what they truly desire. and think twice before making decisions, ensuring that they gain long-term benefit from it as long as possible.

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文：wn in the picture, Chinese college graduates usually have four major choices: participating in Postgraduate Entrance Exams, seeking for jobs, going abroad for further study, setting up one"s own company. Of course, the artist intends to provoke a discussion about the merits and demerits of each choice.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：students

批改：every后加名词单数，改成student

批改：逗号

原文：In my opinion, none of the choices is flawless. Every college students should figure out what they truly desire. and think twice before making decisions, ensuring that they gain long-term benefit from it as long as possible.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：18/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意名词单复数使用正确；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，语法基础很好。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬，继续加油。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语作文批改写作提分的可靠方案。