考研英语一2016年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2016年考研英语一大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon,there is a man sitting on a armchair,watching TV and asking his son to study hard,while his son is sad.On the contrary,in the right-hand portrayal,a father is studying with his son.Evidently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that the power of example can exert a great influence both in our personal life and in society.

The phenonmenon is thought-provking in serval ways,on the one hand,a good example can nuture our souls,promote individual growth and self-fulfillment,thus making life rewarding and meaningful,rather than being self-consuming.On the other hand,a bed example is like a heavy chain that hinders children progress,leaving them with a negative outlook on life,depriving their ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, the power of a good example is the catalyst for personal and societal development,from which we all stand to benefit,therefore we should actively support and adovcate the spirit of a good example,additionally,we must acutely aware the detrimental effects of bad example to ensure our growth stay on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：a

批改：an

原文：In the left-hand cartoon,there is a man sitting on a armchair,watching TV and asking his son to study hard,while his son is sad.On the contrary,in the right-hand portrayal,a father is studying with his son.Evidently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that the power of example can exert a great influence both in our personal life and in society.

批改：描述漫画内容，揭示漫画背后所反映的社会现象和深刻哲理，清晰直观。

原文：serval

批改：several

原文：provking

批改：provoking

原文：nuture

批改：nurture

原文：bed

批改：bad

原文：children

批改：children‘s 要用所有格形式

原文：The phenonmenon is thought-provking in serval ways,on the one hand,a good example can nuture our souls,promote individual growth and self-fulfillment,thus making life rewarding and meaningful,rather than being self-consuming.On the other hand,a bed example is like a heavy chain that hinders children progress,leaving them with a negative outlook on life,depriving their ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

批改：以分论点的形式论述好榜样的重要性，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：aware

批改：be aware of

原文：In brief, the power of a good example is the catalyst for personal and societal development,from which we all stand to benefit,therefore we should actively support and adovcate the spirit of a good example,additionally,we must acutely aware the detrimental effects of bad example to ensure our growth stay on course.

批改：联系自身，总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16/20

作文对漫画的理解到位，写作思路紧扣主题，有些短语句式的表达也不错，基本能够传达清楚作者的写作意图，但在以下几方面还需注意：

1.细节：作文中有几处比较明显的拼写错误。考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

3.内容：两幅图呈现了两位父亲不同的教育方式，形成了鲜明对比：一个是自己做不到，却徒然口头要求孩子努力学习；另一个则以身作则，默默同孩子一起看书。两幅图的寓意是：父母对孩子的教育应当言传身教、以身作则。也可从以下几个方面展开：父母的表率作用；行动的重要性；父母要真正的关心孩子的教育，而不应只停留在口头上等等。

整体来看，作文理解了漫画内涵，段落框架明确，大体上与题目要求保持一致，但是在表达上还存在一定问题。从点评中可以看出作文中有一些表述不当之处，主要体现在词汇使用和搭配不当。后续继续注重练习，加油！

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