考研英语一2010年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2010年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目

考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there is a boiled hot pot filled with many cultural elements, which include kung fu, human nature, Lao She and so on. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is cultural fusion that can exert a great influence both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought -provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant . On the one hand, cultural fusion can ignite our creativity , and promote personal growth and self-fulfillmet, thus making our life meaningful and rewarding. On the other hand,in modern society full of changes, chances and challenges, attaching importance to cultural fusion have become a key factor that distinguishes ordinary people from exceptional individuals, and its significance has become increasingly evident.

In brief , the exchange of culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, which we will benefit from cultural fusion. Therefore, we should actively support

and advocate this quality.Only by doing so can we develop individual culture literacy, and promote different understanding among global civilizations.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：kung fu,

批改：kungfu连在一起

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there is a boiled hot pot filled with many cultural elements, which include kung fu, human nature, Lao She and so on. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is cultural fusion that can exert a great influence both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：能够全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：have

批改：动名词做主语，谓语动词用单数，改成has

原文：This phenomenon is thought -provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant . On the one hand, cultural fusion can ignite our creativity , and promote personal growth and self-fulfillmet, thus making our life meaningful and rewarding. On the other hand,in modern society full of changes, chances and challenges, attaching importance to cultural fusion have become a key factor that distinguishes ordinary people from exceptional individuals, and its significance has become increasingly evident.

批改：论述的内容较为全面，运用逻辑关系词使得句与句之间衔接较为紧密。注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：which

批改：from放在which的前面

原文：from

批改：去掉

原文：n brief , the exchange of culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, which we will benefit from cultural fusion. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality.Only by doing so can we develop individual culture literacy, and promote different understanding among global civilizations.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意kungfu的写法；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意主谓一致问题以及非限定从的正确使用。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好。继续加油。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语写作模板写作提分的可靠方案。