作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2011年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语二作文模板常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目
考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)
二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文
The bar chart mirrors the domestic market shares of three car brands between 2008 and 2009. The number of Chinese brands dramatically increased from about 25% in 2008 to more than 35% in 2009. Meanwhile, The American brand remains slowly rising. But, the proportion of Japanese brands is in sharp decline.
Considering the significance of the market shares wave, it is necessary to point out the far-reaching consequences behind it. Firstly, Chinese brands sharply increased, to some extent, inevitably bringing great benefit to the development of the economy. As Edward Zlotkowski, director of community service at University of Cambridge, put it, "It is generally recognized that auto industry development, under any circumstances, tends to be of great importance to promote economic development. Moreover, the reason why the auto industry tends to be of great importance is that it could enrich the market economy environment. A recent Internet questionnaire indicates that about 83,2% of the respondents hold the same view.
The above-mentioned facts can naturally lead us to the conclusion that great importance should be attached to maintain the high sales volume. Newspapers and news media should promote publicity of it. If the measure can be taken efficiently, a bright future of the Chinese auto industry must be on the way.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:number
批改:不是数量,是比例proportion
原文:The
批改:the小写
原文:remains
批改:时态要用过去式remained
原文:The bar chart mirrors the domestic market shares of three car brands between 2008 and 2009. The number of Chinese brands dramatically increased from about 25% in 2008 to more than 35% in 2009. Meanwhile, The American brand remains slowly rising. But, the proportion of Japanese brands is in sharp decline.
批改:能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容,内容完整,注意避免小的语言错误。
原文:Considering the significance of the market shares wave, it is necessary to point out the far-reaching consequences behind it. Firstly, Chinese brands sharply increased, to some extent, inevitably bringing great benefit to the development of the economy. As Edward Zlotkowski, director of community service at University of Cambridge, put it, "It is generally recognized that auto industry development, under any circumstances, tends to be of great importance to promote economic development. Moreover, the reason why the auto industry tends to be of great importance is that it could enrich the market economy environment. A recent Internet questionnaire indicates that about 83,2% of the respondents hold the same view.
批改:能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因,全面细致。
原文:The above-mentioned facts can naturally lead us to the conclusion that great importance should be attached to maintain the high sales volume. Newspapers and news media should promote publicity of it. If the measure can be taken efficiently, a bright future of the Chinese auto industry must be on the way.
批改:能够对图表中的现象进行分析总结并提出自己的建议。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:12/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,无拼写错误;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变;语法方面,注意时态的正确选取。
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的非常认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。一定要细心一些,注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。
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