考研英语一2011年大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2011年考研英语一大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

It is obvious to recognve from the interge above that a group of people rowiny a boat and some of who throw away rubbish on their hands. Meanwhile, there are uncounttable garbages floating around on the river. The phrase under the image "The remain of tour, suits the scenery perfectly.

On the surface, it can be told that numerous touring guests behaving impolitely, which the image urges others to critilize and not to follow. On the further hand, the iqnorance of the environmental problem is not only the lazy sense of management during commercial activities take place but also the fade of a national civilization.

It is not a problem if you want to enjoy yourselves during travels. But no one, incluting environment, should take on the outcome of your irresponsible behaves. To be more accurate, the act without sense of duty is disgusting as the gorbage drifting on the river.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：recognve

批改：recognize

原文： interge

批改： image

原文：rowiny

批改：rowing

原文：who

批改：whom介词宾语

原文：uncounttable

批改： uncountable

原文：garbages

批改：garbage不可数名词，无复数形式

原文：The remain of tour

批改：The remains of tourism（remain表“残留物”常用复数；“tour”改为“tourism”更准确，指“旅游业）

原文：It is obvious to recognve from the interge above that a group of people rowiny a boat and some of who throw away rubbish on their hands. Meanwhile, there are uncounttable garbages floating around on the river. The phrase under the image "The remain of tour, suits the scenery perfectly.

批改：本段优化：It is obvious to recognize from the image above that a group of people are rowing a boat, and some of whom throw away rubbish in their hands. Meanwhile, there is uncountable garbage floating on the river. The phrase under the image, "The Remains of Tourism," suits the scenery perfectly.

原文：told

批改：seen

原文： behaving

批改：behave作谓语，无需现在分词

原文：critilize

批改：criticize

原文：further

批改： On the other hand

原文： iqnorance

批改：ignorance

原文：commercial activities take place

批改：during commercial activities

原文：fade

批改：fade是动词，用decline

原文：On the surface, it can be told that numerous touring guests behaving impolitely, which the image urges others to critilize and not to follow. On the further hand, the iqnorance of the environmental problem is not only the lazy sense of management during commercial activities take place but also the fade of a national civilization.

批改：本段优化，On the surface, it can be seen that numerous touring guests behave impolitely, which the image urges others to criticize and not follow. On the other hand, the ignorance of environmental problems stems not only from the lazy management during commercial activities but also from the fading of national civilization.

原文：, incluting

批改：including

原文： behaves.

批改： behavior

原文： gorbage

批改：garbage

原文：It is not a problem if you want to enjoy yourselves during travels. But no one, incluting environment, should take on the outcome of your irresponsible behaves. To be more accurate, the act without sense of duty is disgusting as the gorbage drifting on the river.

批改：本段优化，It is not a problem to enjoy yourselves during travels. However, no one—including the environment—should bear the consequences of your irresponsible behavior. To be precise, such acts lacking a sense of duty are as disgusting as the garbage drifting on the river.

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：5/20分。

1.作文内容包含基本全面，主题明确，分段清晰，字数偏少；

2.尝试运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，但错误较多，影响辨识和理解；

3.逻辑连接词错误，内容缺少连贯性；

4.文章原创度很高，很多句子是自己写的，值得鼓励。要多学习老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，取长补短，减少失误，加油！

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