考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语二作文真题每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2011年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

This chart illustrates the changes of some.brands in the car market from 2008 to 2009.In2008,the percentage of Japanese car was the most.It was about35%.Then the domestic cars was approximately25% and American cars was the least that just have 10%.However by2009,the domestic cars raise to around33%.In contrast ,the proportion of Japanese cars declined of about10%.As the same time,the percentage of American cars remained steday.

I think that the following reasons cause this phenomenon.At the first,The Chinese government has introduced a series of policies to encourage car purchases, lowering car purchase prices and encouraging more people to buy more cars.More importantly, China"s automobile manufacturing industry has made tremendous progress, with manufacturing levels gradually rising.So, the results presented in the chart are not surprising.

I firmly believe that domestic brands will steadily improve in the future, while Japanese and American brands will gradually decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the domestic cars

批改：the proportion of domestic cars

原文：that just have

批改：with just

原文：the

批改：the proportion of

原文：As

批改：At

原文：This chart illustrates the changes of some.brands in the car market from 2008 to 2009.In2008,the percentage of Japanese car was the most.It was about35%.Then the domestic cars was approximately25% and American cars was the least that just have 10%.However by2009,the domestic cars raise to around33%.In contrast ,the proportion of Japanese cars declined of about10%.As the same time,the percentage of American cars remained steday.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：I think that the following reasons cause this phenomenon.At the first,The Chinese government has introduced a series of policies to encourage car purchases, lowering car purchase prices and encouraging more people to buy more cars.More importantly, China"s automobile manufacturing industry has made tremendous progress, with manufacturing levels gradually rising.So, the results presented in the chart are not surprising.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：I firmly believe that domestic brands will steadily improve in the future, while Japanese and American brands will gradually decrease.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：在第二段分析原因时，我们可以有两个选择，一是只分析中国品牌占比上升的原因，二是可以加上日本品牌占比下降的原因，关于日本品牌占比下降的原因，可以写日本品牌一些不当行为导致其声誉下降，进而影响其销量等原因。

整体来看，需要注意一些基础的语法问题和表达搭配问题，有时间好好看看文中的批改，细心吸收，争取在接下来的练习中避免类似的错误。

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