2014年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2014年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二作文范文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in China’s urban and rural population over 20 years.In1990 the number of urban population was 300 million,but by 2010,this figure had substantially risen to 666 million.Meanwhile,the number of rural population experienced a significant decline of about 16 million during the same period.

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes,our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system,enabling rural residents to have ample opportunities to obtain better jobs in big cities.In addition,an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes,challenges,and chances,a broader field of vision is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run.Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends?I am confident that the number of urban population is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast,the number of rural population will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：population

批改：指的是不同的群体，此处改为复数 populations

原文：1990

批改：加逗号

原文：16

批改：此处为 160

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

原文：reason

批改：下列有几个原因，此处写为复数 reasons

批改：语法正确，内容表达也很好

批改：内容表达不错，也比较具体

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

批改：此处的表达和城镇人口增加没有形成完整的闭环，建议补充……，and as a result, moving to cities has emerged as their significant choice.

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处细节表达问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法和内容表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 数字的表达一定要精准 3. 标点使用要规范，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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