2021年考研英语一大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

本文将启航教育一对一批改过的2021年考研英语一高分范文进行公开呈现。批改老师对文中每一个失分细节进行了精确标注，对照考研英语作文批改热点话题与评分细则，你可以快速了解考研英语写作的提分方向。

一、2021年考研英语一大作文题目

考研英语一2021年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below. In your essay, you should1)describe the picture briefly, 2)interpret the implied meaning, and 3)give your comments. Write your answer on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、2021年考研英语一大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there is a boy wearing monkey clothes and saying “Dad, many classmates don’t think learning opera is fun”, while his father saying “It’s enough that you like it yourself”. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is sticking with yourself that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, sticking with yourself can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful. On the other hand, following blindly is like a heavy chain that hinders children’s progress, depriving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, sticking with yourself is the catalyst for society and personal development, from which we well stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality, Only by doing so can we develop individual potential, make our world shine with renewed brilliance.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：don’t think learning opera is fun

批改：think的否定句需要否定转移，改为think learning opera is not fun更符合中文表达

原文：saying

批改：前面要加be动词 is

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there is a boy wearing monkey clothes and saying “Dad, many classmates don’t think learning opera is fun”, while his father saying “It’s enough that you like it yourself”. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is sticking with yourself that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：描述漫画内容，表达个人观点，注意语言表达

原文：with

批改：介词要用to

原文：with

批改：同前文，介词要用to

原文：with

批改：同前文，to

原文：well

批改：will

原文：,

批改：句号

原文：make

批改：这是两句话，前面要加连词and

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, sticking with yourself can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful. On the other hand, following blindly is like a heavy chain that hinders children’s progress, depriving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

批改：从正反两面论证了坚持自我的重要性，注意个别语法问题

原文：In brief, sticking with yourself is the catalyst for society and personal development, from which we well stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality, Only by doing so can we develop individual potential, make our world shine with renewed brilliance.

批改：呼应论点，注意个别语法问题和拼写问题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

题目要求：对图表信息描绘全面准确，个人观点及论述内容符合题意；

语言表达：全文用了较多的经典句式，但语法错误和拼写错误也较多，表达效果有待提高。如果目前还不能准确使用例句，也可以尝试用自己的语言表达，锻炼下语法水平；

行文逻辑：第一段描述题干内容并表达个人观点，第二段给出详细论述，第三段呼应论点 ，整体架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；继续多多积累经典句式；加强语法练习；提高单词拼写的准确性；

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