2011年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2011年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二写作冲刺话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chat clearly depicts the changes in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brand was 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same time. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, In the wake of high-spend advancement of society , people’s attitudes towards of consumption have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing number of people choose domestic brand rather than Japanese brand and Japanese brand. In addition, Against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic brand. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：chat

批改：chart

原文：brand

批改：用复数brands，品牌不止一个

原文：brand

批改：用复数brands，品牌不止一个

原文：brand

批改：用复数brands，品牌不止一个

原文：The bar chat clearly depicts the changes in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brand was 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same time. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.

批改：注意brands用复数，其他都挺好

原文：In

批改：首字母小写

原文：high-spend

批改：high-speed或rapid

原文：of

批改：去掉of

原文：brand

批改：brands

原文： brand and Japanese brand

批改：brands, 后面的是American brands

原文：Against

批改：首字母小写

原文：brand

批改：brands

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, In the wake of high-spend advancement of society , people’s attitudes towards of consumption have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing number of people choose domestic brand rather than Japanese brand and Japanese brand. In addition, Against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic brand. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：词汇和句型丰富

原文：brand

批改：brands

原文：brand

批改：brands

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand will likely continue to decrease.

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

1.作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明，注意单复数和拼写；

2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，非谓语动词和宾语从句型很棒；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯；

4.要多内化老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，形成自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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