2013年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2013年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二作文模板备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the part-time job situation of students in a certain university. In the freshman year, the percentage of students taking part-time

job was 67.77%, but by sophomore year, this rate has gradually risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of students taking part-time jobs experienced a significant increase of 17.11% from the sophomore year to the senior year.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follow. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our governoment has made tremedous efforts to promote cooperation between university and enterprises, enabling university students to have ample opportunities to take part-time job. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense economic pressure and as a result, taking part-time jobs has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

what about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of university students taking part-time jobs will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the part-time job situation of students in a certain university. In the freshman year, the percentage of students taking part-time job was 67.77%, but by sophomore year, this rate has gradually risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of students taking part-time jobs experienced a significant increase of 17.11% from the sophomore year to the senior year.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：follow

批改：follows

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follow. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our governoment has made tremedous efforts to promote cooperation between university and enterprises, enabling university students to have ample opportunities to take part-time job. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense economic pressure and as a result, taking part-time jobs has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：what

批改：首字母大写

原文：what about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of university students taking part-time jobs will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

内容：从图表中可以看出，大四学生兼职的比例远高于他们的师弟师妹们(这也在情理之中)。所以考生可以在作文的中间段分析为什么大四学生兼职的比例明显高于其他年级。当然，考生也可以给出些建议，诸如兼职虽好，但也要理性选择，否则可能会浪费时间和精力。

整体来看，主要是细节错误， 要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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